Talk:Do You Have Protection?

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Since I was rv'd, would someone like to explain how the article needs cleanup? It's clear, it's concise, it provides a good amount of information and it's easy to read. Save for piping, this is one of the better articles, from a literary standpoint. That Thing There 19:01, 3 March 2009 (UTC)

It's in need of cleanup, beacuse it's written like a walkthrough - mission articles are supposed to just describe; who gives the mission, what happens during the mission, and what the reward is. There's also the extensive use of 'you', which should, instead, be 'the player' or 'Niko'. I do agree that it's clear and easy to read, but I'm merely following GTA Wiki's Policy
Just a note that while I agree that cleanup is definitely needed for the word "you"; a walkthrough is fine as long as the instructions are neutral. For example, Drive to the safehouse, pick up Roman, Drive to the airport, catch a plane to Anywhere City, etc, however it is good (in my opinion) to just have a "walkthrough" section and have the brief that says In this mission Niko and Roman catch a plane to Anywhere City. Biggest GTA Fan EverTalk 07:12, 23 March 2009 (UTC)