Talk:Vicefree Bus Line - Revision history

A-Dust at 18:36, 6 June 2011

2011-06-06T18:36:41Z

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	Firstly, this is not a stub. A stub is an article that ''could'' be useful, but in it's current state serves ''no'' useful purpose. For articles that ''are'' useful already, but could be even ''more'' useful (contain more information), use {{template\|expand}}, but I honestly think that this article is very complete - What else can be said about it?		Firstly, this is not a stub. A stub is an article that ''could'' be useful, but in it's current state serves ''no'' useful purpose. For articles that ''are'' useful already, but could be even ''more'' useful (contain more information), use {{template\|expand}}, but I honestly think that this article is very complete - What else can be said about it?

	As for that line "<tt>There is an undocumented and largely unknown mini game in [[GTA Vice City]],</tt> '''which goes like this''':" The part that I made bold sounds very unprofessional in my opinion, like part of a conversation, rather than encyclopaedic information. The sentence makes perfect sense without that line. Thoughts?		As for that line "<tt>There is an undocumented and largely unknown mini game in [[Grand Theft Auto: Vice City\|GTA Vice City]],</tt> '''which goes like this''':" The part that I made bold sounds very unprofessional in my opinion, like part of a conversation, rather than encyclopaedic information. The sentence makes perfect sense without that line. Thoughts?

	About the line "<tt>(provided that there are pedestrians waiting to be picked up)</tt>", that's actually incorrect. From memory, any pedestrian that walks past close enough will enter the bus, am I correct? Even if I'm wrong, and not ''every'' pedestrian that walks past enters, still ''many'' do, which still renders that sentence incorrect - Thoughts?		About the line "<tt>(provided that there are pedestrians waiting to be picked up)</tt>", that's actually incorrect. From memory, any pedestrian that walks past close enough will enter the bus, am I correct? Even if I'm wrong, and not ''every'' pedestrian that walks past enters, still ''many'' do, which still renders that sentence incorrect - Thoughts?

JFletcher at 05:09, 14 May 2011

2011-05-14T05:09:19Z

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	Firstly, this is not a stub. A stub is an article that ''could'' be useful, but in it's current state serves ''no'' useful purpose. For articles that ''are'' useful already, but could be even ''more'' useful (contain more information), use {{template\|expand}}, but I honestly think that this article is very complete - What else can be said about it?		Firstly, this is not a stub. A stub is an article that ''could'' be useful, but in it's current state serves ''no'' useful purpose. For articles that ''are'' useful already, but could be even ''more'' useful (contain more information), use {{template\|expand}}, but I honestly think that this article is very complete - What else can be said about it?

	As for that line "<tt>There is an undocumented and largely unknown mini game in [[GTA Vice City]],</tt> '''~~<tt>~~which goes like this~~</tt>~~''':" The part that I made bold sounds very unprofessional in my opinion, like part of a conversation, rather than encyclopaedic information. The sentence makes perfect sense without that line. Thoughts?		As for that line "<tt>There is an undocumented and largely unknown mini game in [[GTA Vice City]],</tt> '''which goes like this''':" The part that I made bold sounds very unprofessional in my opinion, like part of a conversation, rather than encyclopaedic information. The sentence makes perfect sense without that line. Thoughts?

	About the line "<tt>(provided that there are pedestrians waiting to be picked up)</tt>", that's actually incorrect. From memory, any pedestrian that walks past close enough will enter the bus, am I correct? Even if I'm wrong, and not ''every'' pedestrian that walks past enters, still ''many'' do, which still renders that sentence incorrect - Thoughts?		About the line "<tt>(provided that there are pedestrians waiting to be picked up)</tt>", that's actually incorrect. From memory, any pedestrian that walks past close enough will enter the bus, am I correct? Even if I'm wrong, and not ''every'' pedestrian that walks past enters, still ''many'' do, which still renders that sentence incorrect - Thoughts?

JFletcher: Six paragraph version of my edit summary, including open questions

2011-05-14T05:07:54Z

Six paragraph version of my edit summary, including open questions

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==My Changes==
There wasn't enough room in the edit summary to explain all of my changes, and I couldn't just say "cleanup", because many of them were changes that have previously been reverted.

Firstly, this is not a stub. A stub is an article that ''could'' be useful, but in it's current state serves ''no'' useful purpose. For articles that ''are'' useful already, but could be even ''more'' useful (contain more information), use {{template|expand}}, but I honestly think that this article is very complete - What else can be said about it?

As for that line "<tt>There is an undocumented and largely unknown mini game in [[GTA Vice City]],</tt> '''<tt>which goes like this</tt>''':" The part that I made bold sounds very unprofessional in my opinion, like part of a conversation, rather than encyclopaedic information. The sentence makes perfect sense without that line. Thoughts?

About the line "<tt>(provided that there are pedestrians waiting to be picked up)</tt>", that's actually incorrect. From memory, any pedestrian that walks past close enough will enter the bus, am I correct? Even if I'm wrong, and not ''every'' pedestrian that walks past enters, still ''many'' do, which still renders that sentence incorrect - Thoughts?

Also, the "<tt>...serves Vice City and Vice City alone</tt>" line doesn't sound right to me. In spoken language, tone and speed allow for you to give the intended meaning, but in written language, it is left to the ''reader'' to interpret this, and "''Vice City and Vice City''" sounds wrong without the intended tone. The sentence makes perfect sense as just "''serves Vice City alone''", but perhaps that could be changed to something that communicates the meaning even better (without the confusion of "''serves Vice City alone''", as in, "''the only bus line to serve Vice City''")? Thoughts?

While I'm writing this, I might as well mention something else: Is it really true that the mini game is ''largely unknown''? It's not hard to find out about it, all you have to do is be driving a bus fairly slowly in an area close to a bus stop (it's actually happened to me driving quite fast...). Also, it's heavily documented on the Internet. '''[[User:JFletcher|JFletcher]]<sup>''[[User talk:JFletcher|Talk]]''</sup>''' <small>(formerly User:Biggest gta fan ever)</small> 06:07, 14 May 2011 (BST)