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With the subpages, the way you've done it is perfect - give them a header so that they're easily found. However, if you have loads (like [[GTA IV]]), put them all in one section. As for the brief, it's mostly right, but I'm not sure whether it reads too much like instructions. Try making it sound more like a story, as if it was a paragraph in a book. Don't change it to past tense though. Not sure how I would do it, but I'm being deliberately picky because this ''is'' meant to be perfect. [[w:c:gta:User:Gboyers|Gboyers]] <sup>[[:w:c:gta:User_talk:Gboyers|talk]]</sup> 01:09, 1 December 2008 (UTC)</div> | With the subpages, the way you've done it is perfect - give them a header so that they're easily found. However, if you have loads (like [[GTA IV]]), put them all in one section. As for the brief, it's mostly right, but I'm not sure whether it reads too much like instructions. Try making it sound more like a story, as if it was a paragraph in a book. Don't change it to past tense though. Not sure how I would do it, but I'm being deliberately picky because this ''is'' meant to be perfect. [[w:c:gta:User:Gboyers|Gboyers]] <sup>[[:w:c:gta:User_talk:Gboyers|talk]]</sup> 01:09, 1 December 2008 (UTC)</div> | ||
That's fine. You're right, we can't settle for less than perfect if we're calling something perfect. I just realized why external links should be left to the end and have moved them, and changed them to the format you just mentioned. | |||
As for the brief, I see what you mean about while being 100% third person, the lines are like half instructive. I reworded it, changing things like, ''"There are many officers that they must kill on the way,"'' to, ''"There are many officers that they kill on the way in order to survive"''. (taking out must because in a book it wouldn't say they must kill because it's all pre-determined unlike a game). No huge change, but it makes it more neutral (like a book). Take a look at it, but I don't think it's actually ready yet. | |||
The sub pages. Thanks for mentioning that, because that's one thing that I was going to ask at the end when it needs to be tweaked to become ''exactly'' perfect. '''[[user:Biggest gta fan ever|Biggest GTA Fan Ever]]<sup>''[[user talk:Biggest gta fan ever|Talk]]''</sup>''' 05:05, 1 December 2008 (UTC) | |||